Do you see me for me Or what you wanted me to be What happened to that love That we held so dear Why couldn't you hear Me screaming out for you Was it all just a game and I your favorite piece Throwing me away when you got bored of me But I'm not letting you bring me down no more (Refrain) Say goodbye, Say goodbye, To what you knew of me Say goodbye, Say goodbye, No more pushing me I'm not going to let you take my joy You had this death grip of what you called love and I don't, know why I didn't see it before Was I blinded by love or Just to scared to see the truth (refrain) But you're the last mistake I'll ever make I'm a brand new me, the way I wanted to be This is who I am This is who I am You should be happy You helped me Realizing what we ha was a shit dream A fairy tale it may seem Keeping me around your finger with those sugar coated lies But I've broken free So let me tell you one more time Say goodbye Say goodbye To what you thought of me Say goodbye Say goodbye I'm better without you
THis is my 2nd song I've wrote so be easy on me I'm hoping to get better as I go along. I would like some feed back on what you think but no"This is crappy you should stop"feed back I don't need that okay? okay. Hope ya'll like it and I hope one day to sell these
hmmm... so this is a song? Have yoy got any tune for it or something? If es, then keep on working on it! I personally liked the theme. It is not very unique perhaps but then again not every work has to be completely unique. It expresses a lot of emotions and ideas and reminds me of "I will survive" by Donna Summer. There is a mistake:
"...Realizing what we ha was a shit dream...."
Here it should be had instread of had. There are a few expressions I really like, others are also good. So over all a good work
very strong lyrics, I can honestly feel myself in your situation when reading the poem.. the repeat of the phrase "say goodbye" makes it clear to the reader that you have changed and finished trying, a new person, a different individual, a stronger human, these love songs always get me, lol, but as far as negative criticism i cant help you, i think its good just the way it is..great job!
"...Realizing what we ha was a shit dream...."
Here it should be had instread of had. There are a few expressions I really like, others are also good. So over all a good work